Wednesday, October 22, 2008

SHE WAITED...

From everyday kisses
To once a week hugs - to monthly phone calls - to occasional SMSes,
He procedurally moved away from her.

Yet, when he continued to tell her that his feelings for her would never change
And that she was the one he loved most,

She believed him.

Even when he did not return her calls to congratulate him
On his wedding
Or on the birth of his first child.
Both of which she found out when she read his blog.

She desperately waited for his next blogpost
To see if his daughter was named after her.

49 comments:

s w a t said...

Twist in the tale sorta post. I loved it. Btw, I'm a first timer here! Nice blog.

SwAThi.... said...

Nice.... didnt expect the blog thing but..But its the modern world :)

Ghost Particle said...

superb twist, but i felt the emotions of this post. dark comedy? this is life :)

thanks for coming.

Prats said...

That had all shades of grey...but wonder why they even moved apart...and sometimes, one of the partners always happens to trust blindly...very well written

Aaarti said...

hey

now, that was an interesting tale!!!:D

Thanks for droppping by!!:)

Nidhi said...

tht guy is a dog who made fake promises.
tht gal is too innocent to see her life getting ruined.
i can very well relate it my recent post.. have gone to similar.

Sach! said...

I choose not to comment! :)
But still... nice.

divinediu said...

Unique. :)
I liked your blog layout. And your blog. Will go through the posts in the evening coz it is 3:46 am. :P

PS: Thanks for dropping by my blog. :)

divinediu said...

PS2: VISIT, OFTEN.

Suma said...

he's been mean..but she's a fool...:)

nice to see post after post after post...esp after the loooong absence..:D

V. Archana said...

hope the man comes up with the name and make the lady's wait worthwhile ;)

Hey now thats on u "the blogger of orange juice for the soul", if the guy in this post is gonna blog over his daughters name or not :P

Hehehe.. excuse my pj's

Sri said...

From when you started sharing all your real life story in ur blog??!!

Sri said...

From when you started sharing all your real life story in ur blog??!!

Vinesh said...

@s w a t: thank you, s w a t. hope to see you here often :-)

@swathi: yes, that's how bad it got.

Vinesh said...

@ghost particle: yes, dark comedy if you will...

@prats: blindly and foolishly, i must add..

Vinesh said...

@aaarti: thanks, aaarti.

@nidhi: you said it in the same words i feel about the situation, nidhi! sorry that you had to go through something similar..

Vinesh said...

@sach!: no problem...i think i can guess why :)

@divinediu: glad to know you like my blog. will see you on yours soon..

Vinesh said...

@suma: to post like this has always been my intention :-)

she's totally a fool. in fact, i wanted to name this post 'Fool'.

@v. archana: now that would be pathetic, archana - but i admire your optimism :-P

and no, i'm not going to save her :-)

Vinesh said...

@sri: from the time i started this blog, sri. just that this post isn't one of those times :-)

dm said...

Well, well. Dark and bitter. Rather like chocolate.
Must keep writing! Don't let the blog lie idle.
Or, I will prosecute you in the Blog Court for blocking valuable Blog space! Har, har, good to see you're back.

Nidhi said...

Sometimes Love hurts...

Strange coincidence or something.. but I just faced something like that only... and it really does hurt...

Ria said...

Gosh!i wasnt expecting this kinda ending!! I hate ppl who ditch others.

G U R U said...

*ahem* *ahem* ;)

div said...

hi vinesh.. i think this is ur first attempt towards poetry....

its hurting... its mean..[:(]

Manasa said...

waah.. good one..

Nice twist in the end ;)

Vinesh said...

@dm: thanks dm, be my inspiration to blog regularly :-)

@nidhi: sorry to hear that, nidhi!

@ria: yes, but she seems oblivious to the fact..

Vinesh said...

@guru: what? no, it's not what you're thinking! :-)

@div: hi div, i wouldn't call this a poem. it is prose that didn't look good in a single paragraph. so i broke it up and gave it this format.

it's hurting and mean that i write stuff like this :-)??

@manasa: i would call the girl "twisted", actually :-O

Jeevan said...

Nice one buddy! happy deepavali :)

Karthik B.S. said...

sema touching postu.. really.

The Seeker said...

Hey anna, Hope I will be blogging the same years later, One fine day, with the memory of the girl whom I met, who is so much in my mind, I'm not gonna tell her name, But after her,life is not the same. It feels like a no-end game.

Wishes for a happy diwali...

Vinesh said...

@jeevan: thanks jeevan. happy diwali to you too!

@karthik b.s: thanks for writing in, buddy!

@the seeker: sad to hear this! :-(
happy diwali!

venus66 said...

Hope her wish come true.
This posting is a bit touching. Thank you for sharing.

Suresh Kumar said...

Nice poem.

But would any modern girl specially one who writes and reads blogs wait so long. If she has her own blogspot she may expose him totally. :)

DreamVendor said...

I'm here after a long time....and this one is beautiful! How you been?

Vinesh said...

@venus66: glad you liked!

@suresh kumar: she only read his blog. besides, how is a girl "modern" even if she wrote a blog?

@dreamvendor: buddy dv, i'm doing good. good to see you here after so long :-)

Arunima said...

She is such a loser.

Titan said...

Good Narration.kept the tempo going from the first line.
Nice piece of work

Fathima said...

Impressive and simply amazing!

NIRMAL said...

Vinesh,

boys padathala vara madiri irruku :D

seri kozhanda peru enna? ;)

monu said...

very nice!!!

Pri said...

beautiful!
but she is crazy :-/

THUDL said...

nice.......but i find that there is a role reversal of sorts these days.....the guy seems to do all the watching and waiting while the woman moves on....

good one!

mahes said...

sorry for these late comments..but.
the poem/prose..its nice..with a surprising last line..:)

Aneesha said...

Very poignant

yamini said...

interesting yaar

Srivats said...

well writtern - beautiful!

dippy... said...

I am confused. I did not get that feeling out of u. I did lose a lot of you in the recent past. wonderful post, but....still cant understand

Soorya said...

Beautiful! And totally TODAY :)

TheYummyMorsel said...

This is a good one! Love is eternal!

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